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Make the words plain

October 28, 2009 · 7 Comments

Open communication: a trendy phrase coming soon to a press conference near you, if you live in Nunavut, that is.

The Nunavut premier and most other MLAs just signed on to a to-do list that commits them to better communications with the public and among themselves.

I do not doubt their sincerity. Hardly anyone inside the Nunavut government knows how to communicate and their long-suffering clients know this.

But before they get too far into this new-found commitment to communication, I would suggest they also commit to this: plain language.

Here’s a definition:

Plain English is clear, straightforward expression, using only as many words as are necessary. It is language that avoids obscurity, inflated vocabulary and convoluted sentence construction. It is not baby talk, nor is it a simplified version of the English language. Writers of plain English let their audience concentrate on the message instead of being distracted by complicated language. They make sure that their audience understands the message easily.

Plain English, in other words, means good English. Good English uses concrete words, short sentences and commonly-accepted grammar and punctuation. It’s not about multi-syllabic abstractions and dense periodic sentences.

Well-educated people do not need to use big words and convoluted sentences to communicate. In truth, big words and convoluted sentences signify illiteracy.

Jim’s four-point guide to plain language relies on the following:

1. Reduce your use of the passive voice. (If you can’t recognize the passive voice in a sentence, then get a grammar text and learn how.)

2. Reduce your use of adverbs that end in -ly, especially weak intensifiers like “very.” (Remember how Paul Martin sounded whenever he listed his “very, very important” priorities?)

3. Reduce your use of the verbs “to be” and “to have.” (Yes, this is hard, because in English, forms of these verbs are used as auxiliaries with other verbs. Do it anyway.)

4. Reduce your use of abstractions.

But I’m just an amateur.

If the Nunavut government wanted to, they could learn from the pros. The British plain language campaign has been at it since 1979. And the U.S. government also gives the principle some attention.

In Nunavut, the only government agency to embrace plain language is Elections Nunavut. The materials that Sandy Kusugak, the chief electoral officer, prepared for the 2008 territorial election are models of plain language.

In Canada, the Office of the Auditor General embraces the use of plain language for all of the auditor general’s reports. Download and read any of her recent reports to see plain language in action.

Notwithstanding the Official Languages Act, all Nunavut government documents appear first in English, then get translated into Inuktitut and French. A commitment to plain English would make life much easier for the dozens of translators who toil for the GN.

By the way, how’s your English grammar?  Try this quiz and find out.

 

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Here’s what all the fuss was about

October 27, 2009 · 2 Comments

Thanks to the thoughtful generosity of Nunavut’s unofficial archivist, Jack Hicks, I now have the full text of the 1998 Jeffrey Simpson column that I mentioned Oct. 25.

Since the column doesn’t appear any more on their website, I’m sure the Globe’s legalists will overlook the copyright violation. After all, it’s an eleven-and-a-half-year-old piece that’s of interest only to obsessive compulsive geeks like me and the handful of people who suffer their way through this little blog.

It’s worth noting that some things have changed since 1998, mostly for the worse. The sexual assault rate is now about 12 times the national average and the overall rate of violent crime, including all forms of homicide, is higher too. So too, has the suicide rate increased, though there is some variation from year to year.

The abuse of solvents and aerosols as intoxicants appears to be in decline (I’m just guessing on that one,) but cannabis use is likely at 60 to 80 per cent, depending on the community. And we now see increasing use of crack cocaine, crystal meth and various forms of hillbilly heroin, such as oxycontin.

Fuel and power costs are much higher, creating a mounting fiscal burden for the territorial government. So has the cost of retail food and air cargo.

The $600-million budget for 1999-2000 that Simpson refers to was not enough to even maintain the status quo. That figure has now risen to about $1.1 billion annually. This year, the Nunavut government will likely spend more than $300 million on capital projects, compared with only $50 million in 1999-2000.

And, as I said in the post below, a small rising class of middle-class Inuit is now emerging, mostly in the larger communities. I expect that, motivated by self-interest, they will continue to press for more of what got them there in the first place: government spending on new schemes that will create jobs for themselves and others like them, and the preferential hiring of Inuit under Article 23.

But what I don’t see enough of is the political will to help Nunavut’s growing underclass, who need nutrition, mental health services and adult education. Under-nourished stoners don’t make very good trainees or workers.

Tough times lie ahead for the new territory of Nunavut

by Jeffrey Simpson
The Globe and Mail
1998 June 5

(Reprinted without permission.)

Want a challenge? Try this one on for size: Improve the “life chances”
for Canada’s 25,000 residents, mostly Inuit, of the new territory of Nunavut.

On April 1, 1999, Nunavut — or the so-called Eastern Arctic — will be officially hived off from the Northwest Territories. Canada will have a new territory 2,000 kilometres wide and 1,800 kilometres deep.

In that vast and forbidding terrain, only 25,000 people will live. Eighty-four per cent of those are Inuit.

No one yet knows precisely the price tag for the new government and the delivery of services to those widely dispersed people, fewer than a third of whom will live in towns. Around Ottawa the figure most bandied about is $600-million — or about $80 for every Canadian family of four. That $600-million represents roughly what it will cost just to maintain the status quo.

The status quo, however, isn’t good enough, given the staggering social and economic problems faced by the Inuit. Nunavut, after all, will be poorer than the rest of the Northwest Territories, of which it was part until Inuit voted to separate.

Start with population. Almost half the Inuit are under 20 years of age. The comparable figure is 27 per cent nationally. Nunavut’s population is growing at three times the national average. Families are one-third larger than the national average. Where, oh where, are the jobs going to materialize for this burgeoning population?

Some will be created by the new bureaucracies of Nunavut. Training Inuit for those jobs is proceeding, but much more will be required in everything from accounting to the law, financial administration to health care. After all, there’s no sense creating an essentially Inuit territory run by southerners. Outside the new bureaucracies, however, jobs will continue to be scarce.

A fifth of households have six or more persons. The vast majority of the housing is government-supplied. A third of the population in 1996 depended on welfare. The teenaged pregnancy rate is three times the national rate, the infant mortality rate twice, the incarceration rate three times, the suicide rate six times.

Want more depressing socioeconomic indicators? Try these. Smoking is more than twice the national average, heavy drinking three times, cocaine three times, abuse of aerosols and solvents 26 times the national rate. Sexual assault rates are seven times the national average, homicides three times, violent crimes five times.

Every study without exception points to the link between education levels and incomes, and even jobs. Bear that in mind, then try these indicators on for size. School dropout rates are mercifully declining, but in 1991 two-thirds of the territory’s 15- to 24-year-olds were not attending school. The youth unemployment rate, not surprisingly, was almost double the national average.

Want to live in Nunavut? Get ready for higher costs, even higher than in other parts of the Canadian North. Some estimates put living costs 65 per cent higher than in southern Canada. Food, apart from traditional Inuit fare, costs far more than down south. Energy costs are exorbitant: Electricity rates, already subsidized, are five times the national average. In a bitterly cold climate, high fuel-oil heating costs take a big bite from incomes.

No wonder, given all this, that Nunavut’s per-capita income will be 30 per cent lower than Newfoundland’s, Canada’s poorest province. And Nunavut will be much more heavily assisted than Newfoundland through transfers from the rest of Canada.

The Inuit wanted their own territory and voted in a referendum to get one. Parliament agreed, overcoming whatever qualms a few members had about creating territories organized politically around ethnicity. It was, if you like, a vote for partition, a loaded word in a very different southern Canadian political context.

Inuit leaders, and they have some exceedingly good ones, obviously want to maximize federal transfers. No other part of Canada has been so dependent upon them. That dependency shows no signs of diminishing, at least not for a long while.

In strict economic and fiscal terms, the Inuit would have been better off to stay within the Northwest Territories. They chose a different route for a welter of reasons including the classic group-identity one of wanting something to call their own. The challenge of making Nunavut work — that is, by making life better for citizens — will be a formidable one indeed.

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No reason for complacency

October 27, 2009 · Leave a Comment

If the people who run intensive care units are worried, so should you:

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Okay — but how do you make money out of it?

October 26, 2009 · Leave a Comment

Bill Doskoch posts some links to articles that find news websites boosting visitor traffic by building a presence on Facebook.

Yes, even for the tiny newspaper that I work for, this appears to be the case.

But how do you make money out of it? The quest for an answer continues…

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Murder he writes

October 26, 2009 · 1 Comment

Clare Kines, a retired RCMP member living in Arctic Bay, makes a good point.

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Jeffrey Simpson says I told you so

October 25, 2009 · 1 Comment

Mr. Negative Press surveys the audience at the 2007 Nunavut Mining Symposium in Iqaluit. (PHOTO COURTESY OF NUNATSIAQ NEWS)

Mr. Negative Press surveys the audience at the 2007 Nunavut Mining Symposium in Iqaluit. (PHOTO COURTESY OF NUNATSIAQ NEWS)

Some time in June of 1998, your humble content provider remembers reading a column in the Globe and Mail by Jeffrey Simpson entitled “Tough times lie ahead for new territory of Nunavut.” Simpson’s column drew most of its facts from a news story, published in the Globe at around the same time, that bore a headline that went something like this: “Nunavut to be a welfare case: sweeping social, economic problems face Canada’s newest territory.”

 

I’m relying on memory only for the above references, having searched in vain for their URLs. But I can see the headlines pictured in my head, and I remember the gist of the body text. In that 1998 column, Simpson said he supported the creation of Nunavut, because it represented the will of its residents, as expressed in plebiscites held in 1982 and 1992.

But he also drew attention to Nunavut’s utter dependence on the federal government for nearly all its funding, the absence of a healthy private sector economy, the low levels of educational achievement and all the dreary social problems: crime, substance abuse, and so on. Then he drew the obvious inference: that the new territory of Nunavut would struggle to get anything done.

How did most Nunavut leaders react? With pouting defensiveness. The Globe and Mail became an enemy of Nunavut, especially in the minds of those who appear to have neither read nor understood the actual words that the Globe published on the subject.

I recall a “debate” that CBC North’s television service organized around that time. To do this, they set up Jeffrey Simpson as an anti-Nunavut figure, which, of course, he never was or is. And they chose Jose Kusugak, then the president of Nunavut Tunngavik Inc., to defend the honour of the sullied Nunavut project.

Simpson spent most of the half-hour saying he supports the creation of Nunavut but merely wanted to highlight things that will cause problems for Nunavut in the future. Kusugak spent his part of the half-hour attacking Simpson for being “against Nunavut.” He didn’t seem to hear anything that Simpson actually said.

I’ve watched shout-ups on the Fox news channel that were more enlightening. This was not a great moment for Canada’s national broadcaster. But it did illustrate the great fog that enveloped most Nunavut leaders as they stumbled into their new territory in 1998 and 1999.

In any event, Simpson revisited the issue last week in this colunm, published Oct. 20: “Nunavut’s economic dreams are icebound.” And to supply some facts to support the opinion, the paper published this news story in the same issue: “Ten years in, Nunavut gets failing grade.”

This report’s blunt findings are not the inventions of the big, bad southern media. This time around it’s the people of Nunavut who did the grading, through the Qanukkanniq Report Card process that Premier Eva Aariak ordered earlier this year.

But coupled with the kids-sleeping-at-the-Northmart outrage that erupted across the internet this past summer, Nunavut’s 10th year has not received much good press.

Nunavut’s new senator, Dennis Patterson, thinks he can do something about all this in his maiden speech, or so he said this past Oct. 23. But since the national press is not known for its wall-to-wall coverage of the Canadian Senate, Patterson’s efforts may not achieve the desired effect.

All the same, Patterson could, for example, point out that between 2004 and 2007, Nunavut’s economy generated 1,700 new jobs, mostly through increased capital investment by government and the mining industry. He could also point out that in the same period, the unemployment rate feel to 8.9 per cent from 13 per cent. Nunavut’s 2008 Economic Outlook report is full of such impressive figures.

Last, Patterson could point to the emergence of a small but rising Inuit middle-class — affluent property-owning professionals and small-business people who have managed to benefit from the many opportunities that the Nunavut  project created.

The problem, though, is that far too many Nunavummiut, especially those in the smallest communities, do not share any of this. And that’s where most of the bitterness lies.

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“When cultures meet, great art ensues.”

October 20, 2009 · 2 Comments

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The Arctic’s last idealist

October 20, 2009 · Leave a Comment

Big island, small town population.

Big island, small town population.

What happens to a nationalist movement that can’t find a way to pay for its aspirations?

Aqqaluk Lynge, the urbane poet-politican who currently heads the Inuit Circumpolar Council’s Greenland section, doesn’t even try to reconcile the irreconcilable, as is evidenced by this quote in the November 2009 issue of The Atlantic.

“When I’m lying awake at night, I pray we don’t find oil.”

Meanwhile, the economist Anne Sibert, who now advises the government of Iceland, asks if Greenland is too small to be a country.

Ben Muse, an economist from Alaska, writes about Sibert’s article in his excellent blog, Arctic Economics.

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And now for something completely different…

October 15, 2009 · Leave a Comment

It’s their 40th anniversary this month.

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Habito una utopía que no es mía

October 15, 2009 · Leave a Comment

The title of this post is a quotation from a Twitter feed maintained by Yoani Sánchez of Havana, Cuba — one of the world’s most distinguished bloggers: “I inhabit a utopia that is not mine.”

She started her blog in April 2007. Since then, Time magazine named her one of the 100 most influential people in the world and listed her blog Generation Y, as one of the 25 best blogs of 2009. This year, Columbia University’s journalism school awarded her the Maria Moors Cabot Prize, the oldest international award in journalism.

But she couldn’t travel to New York City to accept it; Cuban immigration authorities refused to grant her an exit visa.

Today, she wrote a blog post summing up that experience, “Speaking my mind,” which includes a video that records her last attempt to get a visa from an immigration office located in the Vedado district of Havana.

I read her blog not only because I’m trying re-learn Spanish more than 30 years after I last studied the language and it’s helpful to switch between the English and Spanish versions of her posts. I read it because of her sharp eye for detail and highly compressed prose style, which she uses to raise the humble blog-post to the level of high art. She can make a 300-word post say more than some people can say in a 100,000-word book. Above all, I read it for inspiration.

Here’s an English-language profile of her, broadcast yesterday on CNN:

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